Morning thunder shakes me awake.It's making soup? I don't understand.
Morning thunder sounds just as scary through my pillow.
Morning thunder makes me feel like it will swallow me whole, slurping me up with the soup that it is making.
The repetition is nice, but why is morning thunder important?
Crack! Boom! The rain pounds on the roof.There's some nice writing here, but I worry that (if this is for 3-6 year olds), it's taking a while to ground the reader in what the story is about. If it's for older picture book readers, then sure, I'd keep reading.
The scare goes deep down and my stomach feels sick.
My dog Sammy doesn’t like it either!
She launches out from under my covers like an angry rocket.
Bursting through her dog door, she runs around the backyard barking at the sky. Sammy thinks she can chase the storm away.
I know that won’t work but it seems to make her feel better.